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♥ T O X I C L O V E [Review]
Wednesday, April 30, 2008
Author: __BBLOV3x33 Story Title: T O X I C L O V E ♥ Story URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/_Mei/ Reviewer: SaMaNtHa @ ver-sah-tyle Title: -3/5 I don't really get the title since it doesn't match your fic but its still on going so... Poster/Background: - ---/10 You don't have a poster so I can't really grade this part so your score will be 90 instead of 100. But I think next time you should really get a poster it will attract more readers and it will look pretty! Forewords: -5/10 Your forewords for me was really boring. It was like all others. Your plot you gave out to the readers was also boring, It didn't really catch my attention, it was like all the others I read so I didn't really get excited to read it. But you did add a plot and somewhat of your characters so it was okay. Plot: -5/15 I didn't think the plot was good at al since again I said that it was like all the others. And it was really predictable. I knew what was going to happen next. Your plot was nerd girl liked hot guy, hot guy dates nerd girl for a bet.... It was really a cliche plot. I though you could've add some twist and turns in the fic to make it interesting. Creativity/ Originality: 7/15 again just like I said on the plot it wasn't really original to me since I read a lot of fics like yours. Flow: -9/10 I thought you did great on the fics flow since it wasn't too fast nor too slow. But at some points it was really messy like it was really slow then really fast so.... Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: -7/10 Your spelling was good but your grammar and just how you write needs help. You mixed up a lot of your words like your, my, him, and her. For example you wrote her instead of him. Wooyoung who was laughing her ass off, fell off his chair. It should've been Wooyoung who was laughing HIS ass off not her ass off. Characterisation: -8/10 I kind of got your characters. The main girl was the one I didn't get but the others I got. Writing Style: -5/10 I don't like your writing style its more like a script than a fic. All it was, was chracters talking. You also didn't put in much details so I couldn't really picture anything in my head. And also I thought you should've made her tell the whole story rather writing blah blah blah Overall Enjoyment: -3/5 I didn't really enjoy reading it actaully because I knew what was going to happen so...it was okay! Sub Total: -52/100 Bonus: -4/5 I hope this wasn't too bad! I just wanted to help. And you did want an honest review right? Well I hope you do take my review to mind and improve cause I know that you are a great writer but you just need a little help! Total: -56/90 (0 happiness)
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