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♥ Spread Your Wings [Review]
Wednesday, April 30, 2008
Story Title: Spread your wings. Author: Star-chan URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/SCwings/ Reviewer: SaMaNtHa @ ver-sah-tyle Title: 4/5 The title wasn't attracting nor did it capture my attention but it matched your story really well. It gave your readers an idea of what the one shot was going to be about. So you did great naming your one shot. Poster/Background: 10/10 I loved the poster and bg it was pretty, it also captured all of the emotions in the story. It gave off a sad feeling which was good because your fic was an emotional fic. The poster was pretty. The bg was plain but it was also pretty, I liked how the bg had the characters favorite butterfly on it. Forewords: 7/10 The forewords was kind of short you think? It was good but short. You gave the readers a great prologue, it captured your readers attention. You told us the characters name, but you could of added more but I know that not all authors likes doing that. You should of given a authors note though. So I thought it was good, I took some points off because of the character and authors note and because of the length but other than that it was good. Plot: 13/15 It was a really different plot. I never read a plot like this before, it was new, fresh, and good. But I thought that it was kind of boring since there wasn't a lot of conflicts. A good plot has to have conflicts since there's a Rising, Climax, falling point. I didn't feel that the plot had a rising so work on that! Creativity/Originality: 12/15 The originality was really good. I can tell that it was original, you thought and wrote this story line yourself. The creativity was okay. Like I said on the plot, it was simple there wasn't any conflicts to make the one shot interesting. So the originality was good the creativity was okay. You can do much better with your creativity! Flow: 10/10 The flow was good. You lengthen the timeline well. It wasn't too fast nor too slow, it was perfect. You frequently told us, the readers the time. setting, day ect. It was good! Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 10/10 I don't think I saw any spelling nor grammar mistakes. The vocabulary was also good. So I guess its 10 points out of 10! Charaterisation: 8/10 Umm to tell you the truth I didn't really get the characters. I know that Onew was a nice young man helping out a troubled young lady. The fic girl was a unhappy person but thats about it. There wasn't a lot of information about the characters. I don't think you gave the readers enough information about the characters, because I didn't see their personalities. Writing Style: 8/10 Your writing style was neat and understandable. But I think you need to add more details to your writing so that your readers can picture what you pictured while you were writing! Overall Enjoyment: 3/5 It was okay. I didn't enjoy it much because there were no conflicts, I think conflicts are just my thing ahaha. But other than that I liked it, it was a sweet one shot. Sub-Total: 85/100 Extras: 3/5 Good job on the fic! I hope this review helps you some how! Total: 88/105 (0 happiness)
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