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♥ Not Every Love Song... [Review]
Wednesday, April 30, 2008
Author: S.H.Y=Samantha Story Title: Not every love song is a love song Story URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/houa_01/ Reviewer: JaeLLie.x3 @ ver-sah-tyle Title: 4/5 The title does relate to the stories but if you ave written it like this “Not Every Love Song Is A Love Song” it would have looked more professional and more representable. But I love the meaning behind the title because it´s true. Not all love songs are love songs Poster/Background: 10/10 I love both Poster and BG, so I give you a 10 for that. Whoever made it was good, it suits the one-shot stories Forewords: 3/10 The forewords didn't say much so I can't give you much points for it, but since you stated what one shots will be written I give you points for that Plot: 11/15 The plot for “Wasurenaide” was clichéd so I will give you 5 points. The plot for “Wish” was clichéd as well but the ending was not a happy ending so I will give you 6 points for that Flow: 7/10 The flow for both one shot wasn't that good. If you have describe their emotions with more sophistication then it would have pushed your grade higher. If the scenes in each one-shot was extended a little bit longer then the flow of the story would have been good Spelling/ Grammar/ Vocabulary: 8/10 Spelling was the reason I gave you an 8 in this section. Because in some words instead of saying “were” you put “where” instead and it makes your grammar wrong. You could expand your vocabulary much wider so the sophistication of work can earn you more points in the future and it makes your writing more readable. Characterisation: 10/10 I didn't have any problem with the characterisation. You represented them very well. Especially when Kangin is introduced as a player and a cheater, he stayed the same until the end, which is really good because it shows how their relationship was never meant to be. Writing Style: 5/10 Your writing style is very common, it is mostly how most of the author's write. Expanding your vocabulary can help you write better Overall Enjoyment: 10/15 I really enjoyed reading it, the little mistakes made it hard for me to fully focus on the story. The scenes for both one shot needed to be expanded like I said, if it was done like that I would have fully enjoyed reading it. Subtotal: 68/100 Bonus: 5/5 I will give you bonus for putting one of the Super Junior member on your story. Also because I liked this line “Now there is this wish in me, if it gets hard for you, let me take your little hand...” first time I read it I got teary. It's so sweet that's why Total: 73/100 (0 happiness)
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