|
welcome WELCOME TO VST-REVIEWS Okay so here's the deal; this is where you pick up your review once they are done. Make sure you tag us once you have picked up your review.! Thank you for requesting @ VERSAHTYLE. We look forward to having you again. site info name.VST-Review featuring.FT ISLAND.version1 content.Reviews contact.versahtyle@hotmail.com established.3rd May 2oo9 WebMissie.Jaelliex3 Co-WebMissie.SaMaNtHa navigation TAG.US; song.of.D`month I Hope - FT Island link us 
the.past credits basecodes.chazzie layout.nana host.blogger |
♥ Fragments [Review]
Wednesday, April 30, 2008
Title: Fragments Author: Maia URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/fragments/ Reviewer: SaMaNtHa @ http://ver-sah-tyle.blogspot.com/ Title: 4/5 The title connected well with your storyline. Its a short and simple title but it matched very well with your story! Poster/Background: 5/10 The poster is very pretty. It includes your main cast, the title, and a quote! The poster portrays your storyline very well. I can see the sadness and emotions when I look at the poster. Your bg is very plain and it lacks emotion. The color doesn't match the poster, why would you have a black bg with a yellow/cream poster? But its not your fault so... You just need a better bg that has an equal amount of emotions like your poster. Forewords: 7/10 Your foreword was very well written. You added all the things that are needed in a forewords, you added a catchy prologue, character information and had an authors note. It was good, but that doesn't mean that it was a great forewords. The prologue you wrote was good but it was somewhat confusing for me. Because I didn't know who talking so it kind of threw me off. You should be more clear and elaborate on your prologue! Plot: 15/15 The plot was different and unique. I never read a story where a priest falls in love. It was very nice. The plot was also very well written. Not much to say on this part but good job! Creativity/Originality: 12 /15 The creativity and originality was great. I can tell that the story was made up by you. The creativity was good, but I think there should be more dept in the settings and what's happening around them like explaining to us what the people around them felt and if they noticed the connections between Chun and Ella and what Calvin felt and so forth. The originality was good. Like I said before I can tell that the plot was written by you. Flow: 10/10 The flow was good. It was well balanced. Your timing was also very good. Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 8/10 I saw some spelling here and there; they are only small mistakes but they are still a bit distracting. Your grammar was good, there were no mistakes that I came across. Your vocabulary was okay, you used a lot of basic words but you did add some bigger words. Characterization: 6/10 The characterization was okay. You did a good job at portraying each characters personalities. But there wasn't much information or anything that made them pop. It seems as if your characterization is a bit weak. While reading I didn't really see the characters in my head and you didn't really explain them through your writing. So work on building their personalities. Writing Style: 8/10 I like your writing style its neat and understandable. You had an equal amount of dialogue and description. Most authors tend to use a lot of dialogue but you didn't which is a good thing! Overall Enjoyment: 4/5 It was okay. I enjoyed it but I didn't fully enjoy it. Maybe because of the characterization but it was still very different and good. Sub-Total: 79/100 Extras: 3/5 I hope you learn something from my review! Thank you for requesting at VST! Total: 82/105 (0 happiness)
Sharing Is Caring :
|
Post a Comment