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♥ Endless Love [Review]
Wednesday, April 30, 2008
Story: Endless love by Ishwarya Story Link: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/Ishwarya0309/ Reviewer: SaMaNtHa Title: 2/5 I don't see any connections with the title and your storyline. The title is also very common it didn't capture my attention. Poster/Background: ---/10 You don't have a poster or background so I don't think I would mark you on this section so the total will only be out of 95 instead of 105. Forewords: 4/10 Your forewords didn't say much I think you should of added the prologue of the five plots you had in your mind. It will make people want to apply more and it would also capture your readers attention. Plot: 13/15 The two one shot plots were really simple but good. It was different and it also captured my attention! Creativity/Originality: 13/15 The creativity was okay. Like I said on the plots it was a simple storyline to write. The originality was good. I can tell that the plots were your own! Flow: 3/10 The flow was way too fast. The one shots were too short and everything went by so quickly. It was too fast so the feeling and emotions in the one shot wasn't really there it was like reading a short paragraph and getting nothing out of it. So all in all the flow was too fast for me. Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 8/10 I don't think I saw any spelling mistakes so that's good! Your grammar was okay. The vocabulary was pretty basic. You used one or two big words but that's it. I think it will be good if you expand your vocab it will help you improve on this section. Characterization: 2/10 I didn't get the characters. Like I said the flow was too fast so everything I read just kind of disappears after I finish reading. I didn't get the girls personalities at all. If you didn't list their personalities I would've never knew what they were like. The guys characters, I also didn't get. since you did say that it was your first fic, you still have time to do a better job at giving your characters personalities. Most authors tend to give their own personalities to their characters which is fine so just spending more time on your characters and make sure that your readers understand your characters role in your story. Writing Style: 6/10 Your writing style was neat and understandable. But you don't really add enough details. If you were to add more details then maybe your writing style would've gotten a higher score. So Just work on details! Overall Enjoyment: 4/5 It was good but I would've enjoyed it more if the flow was more balanced and if you did a better job at characterization. But Like I said you still have time to improve! Sub-Total: 55/100 Extras: 5/5 I hope my reviewing wasn't too harsh and I hope you learn from this and improve! AND also please don't be discouraged but be encourage to become a better writer! Total: 60/95 (0 happiness)
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