Author: czakhareina
Title: Shadow of an Angel
Link:http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/3750/shadow-of-an-angel-hyunjoong-kimhyunjoong-romance-ss501-taecyeon
Reviewer: purple_lilly
Site: VST http://ver-sah-tyle.blogspot.com

Title: 5/5
Very eye-catching. It shows that there's a slight theme of fantasy to it.

Poster/Background: 10/10
Poster seems to match the 'shadow' part, but as for the background, I couldn't really tell what it was. At first glance you think 'wow, pretty poster. Reading it definitley!' Because of its look. But after reading it, I could see what you chose those pictures for the poster. A clock to represent the time, and a lake to represent something peaceful. HyunJoong looks angelic (as usual :P) and Taecyeon looks... neutral. As for the girl she seems to be turning away to something. Really creative and nicely made.

Forewords: 10/10
It didn't mention any character's names, but its mentioned in the 'characters' area anyways. It sounded more like a poem than a forewords. But... a nice poem. Really bringing the reader to want to read it.

Plot: 15/15
I really liked your plot. I don't see many fanfics having God and Angels. Good orininality. FULL POINTS FOR YOU!

Creativity/Originality: 15/15
Again, I don't see many fanfics that involve Angels and God... so, I'd say full points for the originality!!! Or about a girl with healing powers.

Flow: 10/10
It was alright. Nothing going too fast, nothing too slow. Just right XD

Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 6/10
Ah. Your punctuation wasn't that good. At the end of a sentence, you're supposed to capitalize it. Most of the time you used it as if it were a comma. Though, it might just be a typing error, I just had to point it out. You're vocabulary is excellent, as were your similies.

[source = chp 2]

'he breathed hard and deep, composing herself' <-- I'm not entirely sure what you meant here. Was it HyunJoong or Luna? Because if it was Luna, it should've been, 'She breathed hard and deep, composing herself.' but, if it was HyunJoong, then, 'he breathed hard and deep, composing himself' -- do you see the difference? These kinds of minor errors could confuse the reader.

Also, you seemed to have put HyunJoong's POV / Luna's POV / Taecyeon's POV when it should've been side of the story instead of pov. pov is Point of view. That means that in their words, meaning first person. (eg: I). If you WERE to use POV, maybe just used 'narrator's POV' instead.

'the haggard looking man dropped the phone to the seat and went to her daughter, "baby, we are not going to yuri today..?"'

Instead it should've been:

'The haggard looking man dropped the phone onto the seat and went to his daughter, "baby, we aren't going to Yuri today..."' - no question mark unless its a question.

Most of your mistakes seem to be because of quick reading. If you took time to have re-read and checked that spellings and punctuation were correct, you could've escaped there errors.

Characterization: 10/10
You put a mix of different characters together. And, instead of using 'you' or '_______/------' you used your own made-up character. Which I think is easier, because how is the author meant to know what 'you're' like? So, nice of making your own character. (I LOVE that you put HyunJoong XD) However, I wonder where Heechul went... Maybe he could've played an important part perhaps?

Writing Style: 8/10
I like it. There's enough dialogue and paragraphs are alright. But... after two lines you pressed 'enter'. It didn't seem like you finished the paragraph.

Overall Enjoyment: 5/5
I loved every single part of this story! It was simply a nice plot, not a lot of things being changed from one to another. ^^

Sub-Total: 94/100

Extras: 5/5
HYUN JOONG WAS IN IT!!! :))))

Total: 99/105